Friday Fictioneers: “Every Friday authors from around the world gather here to share their 100-words and offer constructive crit and encouragement to each other. “
Host: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
She was once magnificent… but time condemns us all to being forgotten. Roots and moss are now taking over, still growing, not caring if they kill the last of her. “Damn you!” I yell.
I walk around in my armour, skeptical that this is really all that’s left. Trees now stand where miles of stone walls once were, and I feel lost. How is this possible? What curse could be responsible of such massive destruction?
A gigantic birdlike creature suddenly rushes on the sky above me, and the noise makes me swing my sword. All I can think is: “Since when are dragons white?”
Unwind The Chaos 
Excellent story, and very well written. I feel as though I am right inside the story. That’s pretty darn good!
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Thanks a lot! I do feel pretty good about my work this week, so glad you liked it!!
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I absolutely did!!
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Great! Thanks again!
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Isn’t it wonderful on the days the words just come together exactly as they need to to produce a good product story!?
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It leaves me wanting more: must be a good sign. Well done Dennisse.
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Hopefully. Thank you!
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You did a great job with the prompt! I loved your story!
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Thank you! Glad you liked it!
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A lovely mythical foray this week. Nice one.
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Dear Dennisse,
Ominous story. One thing that took me out…I would lose reprehensibly. As Mark Twain is quoted as saying, “If you see an adverb, kill it.”
I love the eyeball picture.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Ow, really? I love adverbs! And I researched this one and it originated from the 15th century europe so I feel it fits perfectly. Do you think it’s really necessary?
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It’s only my opinion, Dennisse. But I find adverbs in a piece sometimes distracting, particularly after ‘he or she said.’ Action verbs are more effective, As always, your story, your call.
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No, I mean, yes. lol But I really appreciate your opinion, I’m just starting to write and I want to get better with every piece, so thanks a lot! Besides, another person also pointed that out, so I’ll take it out. You guys know your English much better.
Thanks again!
And p.s.: I also loved that picture, glad you liked it too!
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It’s a process. I’ve learned more in the past nine years of writing than I ever learned in school. Workshops and writers groups are good places to start. For the record, I won’t allow anyone to read the first draft of my novel…I had so much to learn. The best advice I can give you is to be open. That doesn’t mean you should take everything as law.
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True, I feel like if you just take everything everyone says, you’ll end up changing the whole thing completely and it won’t be your piece anymore… And then, there always be something someone doesn’t like. If you are going to go against someone’s wishes/opinion/likes, might as well do it because of something you created and love.
I feel the same way with my novel, it’s my first and I’m just starting it, but I jist feel like I have so many ideas and they are sometimes so different and far away from each other that I’m having a hard time bringing them together.
I think I am going to look for some kind of workshop, thanks for the advice!
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A good book to read for a writer starting out is “Bird by Bird” by Anne Lamott. Perhaps you could start a critique group, particularly if you know any experienced writers.
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Mmm… I’ll check it out, and try that other thing too. Thanks a lot Rochelle, I really appreciate it. Truly.
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I found “On Writing” by Stephen King helpful when I started writing. Half of the book is a biography and the rest is about writing. He is not a fan of adverbs and has some great editing tips too.
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Thanks a lot! I’ll definitely look it up.
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You had me ducking when the creature flew over.
And yes, kill the adverb – or set a dragon on it.
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Yikes, two people pointing to the same thing must be true.(?) I’ll give up and use my blade on it.
Thanks for the input!
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Great story! I hope he fares okay against the dragon. It’s strange the thoughts that go through your mind when faced with such danger – he’ll probably still be pondering the dragon’s colour during the battle!
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Surely! And let’s not even mention how he’s gonna react when he starts seeing the rest of the world he’s stepped into.
Thanks a lot for stopping by, so glad you liked it!
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Oh .. not easy with timetravel is it?.. I see an airplane and no dragon, but I might be destroyed by modernity..
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We all might as well be.
Thanks for stopping by!
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great story. this is one of the best that i’d read this week.
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Yeah? Thanks, that really means a lot!
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Hope I’m not inside a dragon when he attacks it.
Reminded me of A Viking in my Bed (by Jeremy Strong) – one of my family’s favourite books. (A Viking in modern kitchen is quite something.)
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This has a primeval mood, great imagery that evokes a time long past. Well done!
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Thanks a lot!
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I like this tale. Sir Ichabod Crane has slept for 400+ years. Wait until he sees someone using a cell phone. 🙂
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Very imaginative and I especially liked the last line.
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Thank you! I wanted to express somehow that she wasn’t ready to come back.
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